I have three objections to this lujvo (in increasing order of seriousness): 1. The order of bajra plipe renro in the veljvo doesn't matter; you chose the order that's conventionally used in English, but of the six possible permutations, the optimal (lowest scoring in the lujvo-tastiness scoring algorithm) permutation in Lojban is bajra renro plipe. So all other things being equal, this lujvo should be called bajrerpi'ejvi. 2. Let's talk about jvajvo-ness (I'm big, perhaps overly so, on lujvo having elegant place-structure derivations). Currently bajra, plipe and renro modify j1 or j3; in either case there is no justification (that's not specific to bajypipre'ojvi) for dropping the rest of their places. I think it would be a little better to use (za'e) taljvi (j1=t1 competes against j2=t2 in contest j3 for gain j4, each challenging the other in property t3) instead of jivna, for then bajra/plipe/renro go in the t3 spot, being the properties demanded of the competitors (in truth, the property demanded of the competitors is to be the best at bajra/plipe/renro). But still, if bajra/plipe/renro are going into an abstraction place, the rest of their places should follow! This apparent difficulty lends credence to the following point, I think... 3. What's the point of this word? Granted, I didn't know what "track and field" meant before coming across this lujvo (I'd heard it before but thought it just meant a running race), so if I'm getting it wrong, dismiss this point and see it as an opportunity to clarify the meaning of this lujvo. If I understand the Wikipedia article, it's an contest that's centered on running or jumping or throwing. But not necessarily all three. So why not just call it what it is, either a running contest or a jumping contest or a throwing contest? Calling all three "running-or-jumping-or-throwing contest" is like calling apples and tomatoes "apple-or-tomato".
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